The student has effectively made the chosen title clear by placing it at the beginning of the document. However, the essay's focus deviates from the chosen title at times, which may result in loss of marks. The work effectively links different Areas of Knowledge and provides convincing real-life examples to support the argument. While the student shows awareness of different points of view and evaluates them, the essay lacks explicit consideration of implications or counterpoints, which is necessary for a higher score. The work is well-organized with an introductory paragraph, main body sections, and a concluding paragraph, and all external sources are appropriately acknowledged and referenced.
