The student effectively presents the chosen title in the submission, with clear references to the TOK title on the title page. The essay maintains a sustained focus on the title, avoiding digression or irrelevant information. It effectively links the work with different Areas of Knowledge, providing real-life and conceptual examples that are convincing and support the argument efficiently. The student also demonstrates awareness of different points of view and evaluates them, although the essay could benefit from being more critical and argumentative rather than descriptive in certain sections. Overall, the work is well-organized with an introductory paragraph, main body sections, and a concluding paragraph, and all external sources of information are appropriately acknowledged and referenced.
