The student effectively communicates the chosen title at the beginning of the submission, providing clarity to the TOK examiner. The essay maintains a sustained focus on the chosen title, with effective linkage to different Areas of Knowledge. Real-life and conceptual examples are provided convincingly, supporting the argument efficiently. Additionally, the student considers implications and counterpoints, showing awareness of different points of view. While the essay is predominantly critical and argumentative, it lacks proper acknowledgment and referencing of external sources, which is essential to avoid issues with plagiarism.
