The student effectively incorporated relevant and appropriate source material that directly addressed the research question regarding the relationship between pesticides and Parkinson's disease. However, the student struggled with the effective integration of source material throughout the essay, lacking sufficient context and explanation for some studies. Additionally, the student did not consistently use accredited scientific sources, as some sources were identified as tertiary educational summaries rather than primary research. The student also failed to adequately explain technical terms and concepts, which detracted from the overall clarity of the essay. Despite these issues, the student maintained an academic tone and appropriately limited the use of technical terms, ensuring the essay remained analytical and coherent. Lastly, there were inconsistencies in the use of symbols, equations, and units, which should have been addressed for clarity and precision.
