The student's choice of the topic and research question is not well-justified through its global or personal relevance. They should have explained why they chose this specific topic based on personal or global relevance, such as their own interest or experiences, or the importance of the studied topic in the lives of people around the world. This explanation should have been placed at the beginning or end of the introduction, or in a separate section. On the other hand, the student shows personal input and strong initiative in designing and conducting the study, as evidenced by the inclusion of a number of figures including self-made graphs.
