The student only incorporates source material in their essay that is relevant and appropriate to the posed research question, as evidenced by the clear focus on stress and academic performance in the introduced studies. However, the student could improve by incorporating the source material more effectively throughout the main body of the essay by precisely defining its methodology/sample and a strict conclusion, but also by ensuring that it mostly comes from accredited scientific sources. Additionally, the student should provide clear explanations for technical or subject-specific terms and include a clear evaluation of the obtained evidence from empirical studies, including consistently considering their methodology and its quality. Despite maintaining an academic and analytical level of writing, the student should work on improving sentence structure and grammar. Overall, the essay demonstrates a good effort in incorporating and evaluating source material, but there are areas that require further development.
