The student outlines their topic in the essay but does not clarify the specific focus of the investigation in the introduction, which would help the reader understand the purpose. The proposed title is clear and distinguishes itself from the research question, effectively communicating the main variables under investigation. While the student provides relevant background information and maintains a focus on physics, they fail to explicitly identify key physical principles related to lift at the start of the essay. Additionally, the student does not adequately explain their choice of methods and materials in relation to the research question, though they do discuss uncertainties and limitations of their data collection techniques effectively. Overall, while there are strengths in the presentation and focus, there are notable areas for improvement in clarity and explanation.
