The student effectively outlined the matter of their study at the beginning of the essay, making its aim clear to the reader. However, the proposed title of the essay is too long and should be more general. The student established a clear context for the study, describing the relevant background information, purpose, and focus of the essay. Additionally, they identified relevant physical principles at the start of the essay and provided a qualitative description of these principles with diagrams. The student also included a formal development of the physics theory and ensured that the work was focused on physics as a science. Furthermore, they provided a clear explanation of how the selected methods and materials address the research question. The rationale for selected variables and apparatus is clearly explained without dominating the essay.
