The student incorporated relevant and appropriate source material throughout the essay to support the exploration of the research question, drawing from accredited sources such as scientific journals and government reports. However, the incorporation of source material was not always effective, as the student needed to provide more specific details and interpretations regarding the studies referenced, particularly about accessibility to parks and their influence on noncommunicable disease (NCD) rates. While geographic terminology was used appropriately and technical terms were clearly explained, the analysis lacked depth in connecting data to broader implications. Overall, the student maintained an academic and analytical tone, effectively utilizing formal language and structured presentation throughout the essay.
